My advice when folks are struggling with writing in the third-person omniscient is
to Lemony Snicket it up. Give your omniscient narrator strong opinions
about what’s going on. Don’t fall into the trap of assuming that the
third-person omniscient perspective must also use the objective voice;
those are two separate things, and many of the most popular and successful writers who’ve written in the third-person omniscient do not, in fact, use the objective voice.“Willingness to admit the narrative has a voice” is, I think, a big part of what makes young adult literature so much more engaging than a lot of books marketed at adults, particularly adult men.
YES YES YES YES
Character aesthetics: Aziraphale from Good Omens
And the Lord spake unto the Angel that guarded the eastern gate, saying “Where is the flaming sword which was given unto thee?”
And the Angel said, “I had it here only a moment ago, I must have put it down somewhere, forget my own head next.”
And the lord did not ask him again.
